This is it. This is the moment our lives crack wide open like a pomegranate and all its bloody bits spread long and wide.
One month before my daughter turns sixteen, I stand by the hospital bed, look her in the eye, and ask why. She stares blankly at the ceiling, fidgets with the D-rings on her oversized cargo pants, while the social worker questions me about our family life. Where is her father? Is there violence at home? Any history of drug or alcohol use? Where did she get one hundred ibuprofen?
I ask her again. Why is life with me so unbearable? She rolls her eyes, turns her back, curls her fists into tight balls and faces the wall.
I wish I could do the same.
*
The nurse walks in to check on my daughter. I force a smile and a thank you, but she doesn’t react. Maybe she thinks that the children of good mothers do not attempt suicide; don’t rebel, don’t spit fire, don’t curl their hands into tight fists and turn their backs. Maybe she thinks that I drove my own child to the edge with my flaws, my ignorance. I want to defend myself, my daughter, us. But all I have is this moment. This IV drip. This wailing ambulance braking hard outside.
*
The social worker wants to know about home. Home, I repeat in my head. The word resonates with all its accommodating possibilities: noun, adverb, adjective, verb, but its linguistic elasticity gives me no comfort.
It occurs to me that if I tell the social worker how beautiful our home by the water is, with its balcony overlooking a lake, the cathedral ceilings and the vast backyard, everything would be fine. But the woman is impatient; she taps her pen on the clipboard, and the lovely feeling is gone.
*
My thoughts scatter, senselessly. What if this is happening because we live in the wrong house? What if we had bought the house in Auburndale instead of this one? It was a grand-looking old house that sat atop a hill overlooking Lake Ariana. It had Moorish archways and Mediterranean-looking windows; wooden floors that creaked and ceilings that slanted; two whimsical attics, a kitchen with a stucco counter and a black furnace in the perfect corner. It also had asbestos, copper plumbing and a moldy roof. Naturally, we didn’t buy it, but now I wonder if maybe a touch of mesothelioma would have kept us together; if disease would have made us more compassionate, more loving, better people. Maybe the asbestos and the mold would have glued the seams of our lives.
*
When I’m informed that she’ll be put under suicide watch, I recite a mental litany: My love, the door is open and translucent for you to see inside me. I won’t make demands, I won’t judge, I won’t speak. Just give me a sign, and I’ll be weightless, patient, tender. Let’s name that which we lost along the way. Let’s bury the unnamed thing. Let’s give this thing a name and punch it square in the throat. Let’s sweep it under the rug. Let’s fix this. Together. Let’s. Do. Something.
They bring her into the room to say good bye. The underwire in her bra has been removed, so have the shoe laces, her pink scrunchy, her belt, and the flaps of her baggy jeans. Her eyes beam with an anger so fresh and mean that it makes my whole body tremble. I’m supposed to say something reassuring, something magical, something important. I’m the mother. I’m expected to mend this broken child. But I can’t.
*
She climbs slowly into the van. I wave, but she turns away.
I can’t breathe. I need to be monitored too. Preferably, next to her. Put us into solitary confinement together. Beat us and starve us and do not let up until I put her pieces back together. Until she is whole, finally or again. The van signals a right turn, slows down, then disappears around the corner, leaving me behind in the middle of the street, on my knees. I stay there feeling a sharp rock under my left shin. And I cry. Not for my daughter over whom I have lost complete control, but for the manageable thing. This pain digging into my flesh. This thing with a name and a solution. This hurt which I can stop. This which I can fix.
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Adriana Páramo is a cultural anthropologist, women’s rights advocate, and author of Looking for Esperanza and My Mother’s Funeral. She currently writes from Qatar where, oddly enough, she works as a Zumba instructor. Adriana invites you to visit her travel blog.
15 comments
Jackie says:
Sep 18, 2014
A powerful distillation of your piece in Fourth Genre. I enjoyed both.
Sarah Wells says:
Sep 18, 2014
Excellent and heart wrenching. Love this, Adriana.
MaryAnn Barton says:
Sep 19, 2014
Sad and brilliant. Especially:
“now I wonder if maybe a touch of mesothelioma would have kept us together”
“My love, the door is open and translucent for you to see inside me.”
“on my knees. I stay there feeling a sharp rock under my left shin. And I cry. Not for my daughter over whom I have lost complete control, but for the manageable thing. This pain digging into my flesh. This thing with a name and a solution.”
Corey says:
Sep 19, 2014
Beautiful piece! Bravo.
Susan Miller says:
Sep 22, 2014
Naked brilliance. I have felt this pain and sadness from both sides. Thank you for putting into words a piece of the broken spirit.
LISA CANTLER says:
Sep 22, 2014
I can still hear your voice when I read your words dearest friend. Your hurt and confusion brought me to your side to hold you up while I read, knowing all the while this was in the past.
Funny. It all comes in different sizes and situations, but as moms we have all been there somehow. Your honesty inspires me. Your words raise me to a better sense of self.
Your word-painting keeps me thinking. Thank you for letting us in!
Debra Smith says:
Sep 22, 2014
I’ve read it three times and from the first few words of “cracked wide open” you fell the raw emotion coupled with all the random yet connected minute observations that emergencies bring with them. Your “what if” statements about the asbestos in the moldy beautiful house maybe giving a family something to rally around are incredible, visual, crushing. Amazing work.
Jeanett Turriago says:
Oct 10, 2014
Adriana, Una excelente historia. Me dio escalofríos! Estoy muy orgullosa de t.
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Awya says:
Dec 23, 2014
Powerfully deep writing that conveys many an emotion, struggle, event in such few words. I term this as brilliant writing. Thank you so much for this evocative piece.
Amanda Moonbeam says:
Dec 30, 2014
You had me from the opening, vivid & startling. Particularly loved this:
“Let’s name that which we lost along the way. Let’s bury the unnamed thing.”
Made me want to write, burn the pages after.
Also, I was surprised by your mention of Auburndale & Ariana, my Da lives there, I spent many a childhood summer swimming in those alligator infested lakes. 🙂
Thanks for writing.
Kelly Thompson says:
Jan 4, 2015
Beauty. I have been there.
Emma says:
Jan 19, 2015
Beautifully written, and so real. The rawness of it all creates such an intense yet enticing atmosphere and tone – I couldn’t and didn’t want to stop reading! The narrator’s identity also adds weightly character, as I felt like I was the mother in emotional and psychological pain with the internal struggle bringing me down. I liked how you portrayed this struggle through the eyes of a mother and what society (and evidently even herself) expects her to do, to “mend this broken child”. I think this is very powerful, and again, what makes the story so painful.
Mar says:
Aug 25, 2016
Your description and depiction of this scenario is 100% spot on….Thank you for putting such raw emotion into such raw words.
A Burgert says:
Oct 28, 2024
I have lived this moment many times… She’s still alive, but the questions always stay to ask.