Astonish (v.)
In 1300, there was a word, astonien, which meant “to stun” or “strike senseless,” which came from the Old French estoner—to stun, daze, deafen, or astound. This came from Latin’s ex- meaning “out” + tonare: to thunder. (See thunder).
See thunder, hear lightning, ride air, the wind is your breath, you lift the whole world by its hair. You’ve been dared to run to the end of the block. It’s your eleventh birthday, and the truth-or-dare sleepover dare was to run naked on your own street. So here you are in the just-starting rain, one arm pressed across the nuts of your just-starting breasts, the other straight down to cover your front with your fist. You jog this way. You were dared to make it to the stop sign. The night is all hands, grasping like a mother, furious at this and concerned. The wind in the trees tugs your ponytail. Mean Mrs. Johnson’s porch light pokes your eye. The yellow of the curb where your bus will stop Monday morning curls up in a ribbon to try and tie you to a tree. Your eyes are fixed on the sign and your heart pounds Stop-Stop-Stop, and when you make it to the end of the block, your breath hits the red gong and then: thunder.
The sky is opening up, a slit in the fabric of the night-gone-strange. You turn and your house full of girls is a strobing firefly. So small. They’ve been so mean all night. This was a mean dare. Nicole said gah, just do something for once in your life, you are so boring, so useless. It was your birthday but Jen G. said it was like you weren’t even there. Your eyes are full of sweat, tears, drips of rain. You’re so small in the rain. You were supposed to touch the sign. It was part of the dare. But you need both hands to cover you. You take longer than you should to decide which hand to move. A car appears at the end of the street and slows. Now the night retreats and it’s just you like a butterfly pinned to a black board. You turn away from the car to hide your face, the parts that your hands cover. Like a child who thinks they’re invisible if they close their eyes.
From the car, a man’s voice:
Young lady, young lady.
Astonishment (n.)
From the 1590s, “a state of being amazed or shocked with wonder.” Earlier, in the 1570s, it meant “paralysis.”
I was paralyzed.
A different man’s voice:
Are you okay?
I could not speak. His voice reminded me of a yellowjacket, twitchy. I could tell even with my back turned that the car was a hive of yellowjackets, humming with men, their laughter now like stingers. The stop sign a gong: thunder again.
It’s going to rain real hard, honey. Where is your house?
They’re speaking to my back. Their headlights light the wet grass around my feet. They are the headlights, I am the lightning. They are a doctor’s headlamp, I am feverish-sick. They are sun in a magnifying glass. I’m a butterfly and my wings are soaked and folded in the drip-rain. I’m standing, but I’m a beetle upside-down in a puddle. I’m shaking, but I can’t move. I can’t move. Thunder again: BAM. That was my heart. CREAK. That was their car door opening.
Get her, guys.
Astound (v.)
From the mid-15th century, with more of the original sense of Vulgar Latin extonare. The unusual form is perhaps the intrusion of an unetymological -d as in sound and taken for the infinitive, or/and by the same pattern which produced round (v.) from round (adj.).
Suddenly, round me were my friends in their nightgowns, tugging my own down over my head, patting my back, my hair. Round me, protecting me. They were all eleven but shouting at the laughing men to move on: Get on down the road now, you hear? Someone said that, one of my friend’s voices, and she sounded so grown and commanding. And the car did move on. And the thunder stopped and we walked back to my house a circle with me in the center, in a gentle mist, their hands on my shoulders telling me they were sorry, like they were all themselves as mothers from years in the future, looking back on this night, astonished, astounded, remembering how young we were.
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Diane Zinna is the author of the novel The All-Night Sun (Random House, 2020) and Letting Grief Speak: Writing Portals for Life After Loss, a forthcoming craft book on the art of telling our hardest stories. Since 2020, she has led a free Zoom class called Grief Writing Sundays. Meet her there or at www.dianezinna.com.
29 comments
Helen says:
May 14, 2024
I so love this!
Diane Zinna says:
May 16, 2024
Thank you so much for reading, Helen!
Susan says:
May 14, 2024
I was so afraid for that little girl, in all her insecurities. Then the threat of men’s voices in the background, ominous. And I am so relieved that her friends rallied, acted like friends. All astonishing.
Diane Zinna says:
May 16, 2024
Thank you, Susan!
Kathy says:
May 14, 2024
Beautifully crafted. You traveled such a long distance, from innocence, to terror, to redemption within such elegant economy. Brava!
Diane Zinna says:
May 16, 2024
I appreciate this so much. Thank you, Kathy!
Cassandra Hamilton says:
May 15, 2024
A gripping situation on its own. Beautiful sentences on their own. Compelling definitions of words both as islands and part of this world. Everything beautifully placed and woven together. I was gripped, riveting and admiring all the way through.
Diane Zinna says:
May 20, 2024
Wow. Thank you, Cassandra!
John says:
May 15, 2024
What a powerful and evocative piece on astonishment! The imagery and emotion captured in the narrative are stunning, bringing to life the intensity and vulnerability of youth. The way the word “astonish” is woven into the story adds depth, illustrating both the wonder and the shock that can come from life’s unexpected moments.
Gail Mackenzie-Smith says:
May 15, 2024
Wow, I’m in tears! How beautiful.
Diane Zinna says:
May 16, 2024
Thank you for reading with such an empathetic heart!
Lisa says:
May 16, 2024
I went on a whole journey reading this piece. I experienced all the feels: excitement, irritation, fear, anger, relief…joy! Absolutely stunning!
Cathy Nagel says:
May 17, 2024
Such a beautiful piece, Diane! I’m so glad to see it published here!
Kerry says:
May 20, 2024
This is so powerful. I felt it all
Suzy says:
May 20, 2024
This is so beautiful! That the girls came to the rescue was unexpected.
Sara says:
May 23, 2024
I was astonished myself here (a cheesy line, I know), having read “The All-Night Sun last year in a search for comps for my book. When I saw your name here, I was so excited. (Could this be the same lovely woman?)
Thank you for sharing your words, Diane Zinna. I especially love how the nonfiction in this piece flows so well with the fiction and the tension is gut-wrenching to the end.
Diane Zinna says:
May 23, 2024
Sara! Thank you so much for reading this and The All-Night Sun-and congrats on your own book. I hope you found great comps–they are so hard to nail down! If you need a blurb, I hope you’ll send your book my way!
Sarah Turner says:
May 24, 2024
This piece is powerful and moving. Exquisite use of language. I could feel it all and know the images will stay with me. Thank you!
Hanna Saltzman says:
May 26, 2024
This piece is gorgeous. I can feel the images pulsating like the thunder and lightning. The ending is itself astonishing, and opens the sky to hold a tender complexity. Thank you!
Gil Frank says:
May 30, 2024
I like the mix of beautiful language, uncommon form, the use of ‘dictionary’and the tension and its resolution
C.K. Adams says:
May 30, 2024
WONDERFUL piece. It flows so fluidly.
Linda says:
Jun 3, 2024
Wow, I am just floored. Talk about raw and honest… Thank you for this story, Diane. I am going to look up more of your work and tell others to do the same!
Penny Guisinger says:
Jun 22, 2024
Diane! I’m so happy to see this gorgeous piece of writing! WONDERFUL. Congratulations!
Helene Rosenthal says:
Jul 10, 2024
wow. i casually stopped by brevity to see what they were showcasing and i am so blown away by this essay. we have all been that 11-year-old girl: so naked in our aloneness.
Robin says:
Jul 22, 2024
Gor.geous.
Elizabeth says:
Aug 21, 2024
Diane – This is such a beautiful piece. The structure adds to the tension – my heart was beating fast by the time I reached the end. Your writing transports the reader. Thank you for sharing this.
pubgwala says:
Sep 3, 2024
wow. i casually stopped by brevity to see what they were showcasing and i am so blown away by this essay. we have all been that 11-year-old girl: so naked in our aloneness.
saad says:
Sep 8, 2024
I really enjoyed the full essay!
Jennifer Anne Gordon says:
Nov 4, 2024
This is one of the best essays I have ever read, truthfully I heard this before it appeared in Brevity, but I can say without a doubt that I have thought about it every day.
Brilliant, beautiful, heartbreaking…both so personal as well as painfully universal. I love this piece