6 responses

  1. Eliana
    May 10, 2014

    What is that emotion? Love this last scene so much.


  2. Lola
    May 10, 2014

    I wish I knew what was on their faces..


  3. Jayne Martin
    May 17, 2014

    I like how this had been broken up into the three segments, and the use of present tense serves well to build the tension. Great descriptions of all the different wheelchairs converging on the scene and just the right tone of humor. The cell scene was a shocker. As for the emotion of the officers, my guess is it was there own shame for the actions of their department. Congratulations on finally making it into Brevity. Well-deserved!


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